[REVIEW] Weird Love

Title: Weird Love

Author: Kat_18

URL: http://winglin.net/fanfic/kat_18/

Reviewer: THE_AnGeL @ My Sensation

Note: Warning. I’m a strict reviewer and if I say any harsh or offensive words, it’s only for you to improve in your next fanfic.

Story Title: 2/5

Honestly I don’t get why the title was Weird love and it sounded different to the storyline. The title wasn’t that catchy.

`Appearance: 8/10

Your poster is very nice. The guys look hot and you hired are great graphic designer and the colours mixed.

`Forewords: 5/10

You didn’t do much in the forewords. You just plainly introduced the characters . You didn’t do a plot or any catchy sentences to make the reader read on. You could’ve introduced yourself more and tell the readers things you like to do etc. Next time try and make your forewords more interesting.

`Plot: 7/15

Your plot was way too cliché. It was the ordinary love at first sight, go out, a 3^rd person, misunderstandings and then they clear up. It was too plain. Next time you write a fanfic try and think of a more interesting plot and don’t the usual ‘love triangle’.

Another thing I found ridiculous was how they love at first sight and they get boyfriends at the same time! Plus they break up for the same reason. This I found was way too over the line.

`Characterization: 6/10

Your characterization is okay but sometimes you went off their personalities. Try and keep it with their personality s much as possible.

`Creativity/Originality: 4/10

As I have stated your story isn’t original. Some parts were a little different but mostly it was cliché.

`Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 4/10

I found about 5-8 mistakes in each chapter and it was pretty hard to read. Here are some mistake that you’ve made.

You: DID NOT HEAR

Correct: Didn’t hear

You: why only me you also quiet!

Correct: Why me? You’re also quiet!

You: kisses aaron at the cheek

Correct: Kisses Aaron on the cheek

You: hey Guys were hear and BTW this is Kat!

Correct: Hey guys. We’re here and by the way, this is Kat!

You: went our the bar to her room
Correct: went out the to her room

`Flow: 4/10

Your flow was way too fast and then it suddenly slowed down between chapter 20-50. It was pretty hard to keep up with the timing.

`Writing Style : -5/15

At the first 20 chapters or so you did capitals which were really weird because you didn’t know if it should be capitals or not. The rest of the chapters had lower case but some of the letters that should have capitals didn’t have capitals.

For example: oh hi mike

Should be: Oh hi Mike.

Another thing that you shouldn’t do is script writing which most reviewers hate. Try and use speech marks.

`Overall Enjoyment: 3/5

It was an okay story. You did a pretty good job.

`Total : - 48/100

`Bonus : -5/5

1. For not getting angry at my comments.

2. For asking me. LOL

3. Requesting @ My Sensation

Overall Total: 53/100

Don’t worry about the score. I got lower in my first fanfic. Hope you can do better in your next fanfic.