Invisible Letters
Title: Invisible Letters
Author: haebie
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/gubbiedubbieo3/
Reviewer: jjwyl
`Story Title[did it catch my attention?] : -3/5
This title wouldn’t really stand out in the list of hundreds of other story titles. But if I chose to click on it and actually look at the title, I’d be curious how the story is.
`Appearance[what was my first impression? Did it catch my attention?] : -7/10
The poster is very dull-looking but it’s simple. I would just recommend using a larger font for your title and using a more attractive font style.
`Forewords[did your forewords make me wanting to read more?] : -8/10
Your foreword was short overall, but it did make me curious. I wanted to click on the Next button because your foreword seemed so mysterious and appealing.
`Plot[was the plot cliche or was it interesting?] : -13/15.
It was amazing. I really like your idea. It was really sad at the end. But I got to take marks off cause it’s about the same plot as others. But still, you made it so intriguing!
`Characterization[was I able to learn about the characters?] : -9/10
I understood how HyeKyung felt in the story. I understood what type of person she was. But Donghae, I was still a bit confused. I knew he loved her and that he was her guardian, but I didn’t fully understand what kind of person he is.
`Creativity/Originality[was it creative?] : -8/10
I loved the way you used the notebook and the wall in this story. I also loved how you were able to help HyeKyung get back on her feet using a different method other then using a real person.
`Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary[was I able to understand what you were trying to say?] : -9/10
Spelling and grammar were perfect! But I would recommend using a wider range of vocabulary.
`Flow[was it too fast or too slow to my liking?] : -8/10.
The flow was great. Your timing on the story was really well. I just thought that the ending was a bit too fast. Donghae left so quickly. And the time during the two weeks, you should describe what happened during those two weeks.
`Writing Style[did your writing style make it easy for me to read?] : -14/15
I like your writing style, but next time, try to put a couple sentences together to form a bigger paragraph. It would make the whole thing look a lot neater.
`Overall Enjoyment[did I enjoy this story?] : -5/5
I loved it! Kept me reading the entire time!
`Total : -84/100
`Bonus : -1/5
For Donghae, since I love him.
Overall Total: -85/100
Author: haebie
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/gubbiedubbieo3/
Reviewer: jjwyl
`Story Title[did it catch my attention?] : -3/5
This title wouldn’t really stand out in the list of hundreds of other story titles. But if I chose to click on it and actually look at the title, I’d be curious how the story is.
`Appearance[what was my first impression? Did it catch my attention?] : -7/10
The poster is very dull-looking but it’s simple. I would just recommend using a larger font for your title and using a more attractive font style.
`Forewords[did your forewords make me wanting to read more?] : -8/10
Your foreword was short overall, but it did make me curious. I wanted to click on the Next button because your foreword seemed so mysterious and appealing.
`Plot[was the plot cliche or was it interesting?] : -13/15.
It was amazing. I really like your idea. It was really sad at the end. But I got to take marks off cause it’s about the same plot as others. But still, you made it so intriguing!
`Characterization[was I able to learn about the characters?] : -9/10
I understood how HyeKyung felt in the story. I understood what type of person she was. But Donghae, I was still a bit confused. I knew he loved her and that he was her guardian, but I didn’t fully understand what kind of person he is.
`Creativity/Originality[was it creative?] : -8/10
I loved the way you used the notebook and the wall in this story. I also loved how you were able to help HyeKyung get back on her feet using a different method other then using a real person.
`Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary[was I able to understand what you were trying to say?] : -9/10
Spelling and grammar were perfect! But I would recommend using a wider range of vocabulary.
`Flow[was it too fast or too slow to my liking?] : -8/10.
The flow was great. Your timing on the story was really well. I just thought that the ending was a bit too fast. Donghae left so quickly. And the time during the two weeks, you should describe what happened during those two weeks.
`Writing Style[did your writing style make it easy for me to read?] : -14/15
I like your writing style, but next time, try to put a couple sentences together to form a bigger paragraph. It would make the whole thing look a lot neater.
`Overall Enjoyment[did I enjoy this story?] : -5/5
I loved it! Kept me reading the entire time!
`Total : -84/100
`Bonus : -1/5
For Donghae, since I love him.
Overall Total: -85/100
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